Friday, 30 September 2011

Practically Strangers-Script Redraft

EXT. Chiswick Graveyard. Day

Hallie sitting near a grave (of her boyfriend). She seems engaged in a conversation
Hallie
It's not easy, you know. But you learn to get by
it's like there's something missing in my life 
something that i can never replace....

*Flash*- Flashback begins (Post Production)

INT. Near (inside) a flat in Brentford. Day

Hallie walks out of the flat with a bunch of roses in her hand, she walks along the road, looking a little in deep thought 

Hallie
(Non- diegetic Voiceover- in her mind)
You learn to survive 
To carry on, even if something is missing 
A part that you rely on
A part that you crave
 I don't know how I've lived for the past year and a half
I'm still not used to living without you

EXT. Musical Museum Bus Stop. Day

Hallie 1 sees Claire sitting at the bus stop. She hears the girl talking to herself and finds her strange and feels uncomfortable
Hallie
(Voice over turns into Diegetic Dialogue)
How could you leave me?
Without even saying goodbye
I waited for you for hours(On-set dialogue begins)
You promised that you'd make it 
and yet you left me standing there like a bloody idiot 
for 3 hours, for 3 hours?!?!?! 
*turns to Claire*
Has that ever happened to you? 
Being left to stand in the pouring rain
waiting for your boyfriend near a cinema for 3 hours?



Claire
*looks away*
(Voiceover- in her mind)
Why is this girl talking to me? Someone just shut her up!

Claire and Hallie get onto the E3 bus

EXT. Outside/Near Chiswick grave. Day

Hallie and Claire get of the E3 bus. Both walk in opposite directions, without a word or looking at teach other

EXT. Chiswick Graveyard. Day

Hallie walks towards a grave and kneels down, she places the roses on the grave
*Flash* Flashback Over (Post Production)
Hallie
And that's what happened
*laughs*
You'd think it would've happened differently 
I wish it did too but there we have it 
a complete stranger that I'd never met
helped me to see it differently
See life differently 
And the funny thing is I never even spoke to her 
but come to think of it she did look familiar
*sighs*
 James, if only you could see me now 
you'd understand....
Gosh, I miss you more than you know 


EXT. Chiswick Graveyard- Day

Claire Enters. to the same grave as Hallie. She is shocked to see Hallie sitting there. Claire places a card near the same grave, however at this point Hallie does not see it as she is focused/deep in thoughts.Claire slowly walks away not being noticed. Few moments later she sees the card and suddenly turns around and sees Claire walking away. Claire opens the card to see that the name on the card is the same as the grave. She puts the card down next to the roses.

EXT. Chiswick Graveyard. Day

Claire is walking away. Hallie in the background far away
Claire
Its not easy you know, by you learn to get by.

The script had to be re-drafted as I realised that in the 1st Draft, there was not enough dialogue that would last over 5 minutes. Also I realised that we would use the dialogue to give the audience more information about James and his relationship with Hallie. Especially with the nature of his death. I think that there needed to be more of a conversation between Hallie and Claire. We had to find a way to explain the story and relationship between all the characters. 










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